Dear Marek, Petr, and Lukas, <br><br>Catharina and I have completed our proofreading, and we have put together a few thoughts. When you have a moment, we'd be happy to hear your input! <br><br><b><br></b><div style="margin-left: 40px;">
<b>All licenses:</b><br>* 4(a): extra line break? We've noticed that the paragraph appears to be disrupted, possibly by an extra line break. Perhaps the whole clause should just be one paragraph? <br>* all licenses without NC element: We noticed that in the NC licenses (BY NC, BY NC SA, and BY NC ND), there are three subsections for the collecting society language in Section 4 (identified by i., ii., iii.). However, in the non-NC licenses, the collecting society language in Section 3 only includes two subsections (i. and ii.). Usually these items have the same number of subsections, so we'd just like to confirm if the current version is correct.<br>
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</blockquote><div><div><br></div><b>BY-NC:</b><span style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);"></span><br>
* 4(c): Ordinarily, Section 4(c) includes a reference to to Section 3(a). However, now there is the following "... v souladu s ustanovením čl. 3 písm. b)." Is this also okay following your current structure? <br>
<div class="im"><br><b>BY-NC-ND:</b><br><br>
* 3 (end of paragraph): As a small suggestion, we often include the phrase "... but otherwise you have no such rights to make
Derivative Works." at the end of the section, after all the permissions are listed. It is of course not incorrect to leave it out, but perhaps it would be a helpful clarification for the users. <br></div></div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">
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<div style="margin-left: 40px;"><div><br></div><div><b>BY-ND:</b></div><div class="im"><div><br></div><div>* 3 (end of paragraph): Same as the above. </div>
</div></div><div style="margin-left: 40px;"> <br><b>BY-NC-SA:</b><br>* 4(d): Smae as comment for BY NC. Should this clause be the equivalednt of "...consistent with
Section 3(a)..." instead of "...v souladu s ustanovením čl. 3 písm. b).?<br>* 6: I believe there is a missing period after: POSKYTOVATEL NEODPOVÍDÁ ZA ŽÁDNOU ŠKODU NAD MINIMÁLNÍ ROZSAH
STANOVENÝ PLATNOU PRÁVNÍ ÚPRAVOU, COŽ NABYVATEL BERE NA VĚDOMÍ<br><br><b>BY-SA:</b><br>* 1(k) Is there perhaps a missing reference to the Unported in the definition of Creative Commons compatible license? See the text from the US license, for example:<br>
<div style="margin-left: 40px;"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: arial; line-height: 16px; font-size: 15px;"><b style="color: rgb(34, 34, 34);">"Creative Commons Compatible License"</b> means a license that is listed at <a href="http://creativecommons.org/compatiblelicenses" target="_blank">http://creativecommons.org/compatiblelicenses</a>
that has been approved by Creative Commons as being essentially
equivalent to this License, including, at a minimum, because that
license: (i) contains terms that have the same purpose, meaning and
effect as the License Elements of this License; and, (ii) explicitly
permits the relicensing of derivatives of works made available under
that license under this License or either a Creative Commons </span><span style="font-family: arial; line-height: 16px; font-size: 15px;"><font color="#ff0000">unported</font></span><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: arial; line-height: 16px; font-size: 15px;"> license or a Creative Commons jurisdiction license with the same License Elements as this License.</span><font color="#333333" face="arial" size="4"><span style="font-size: 15px; line-height: 16px;"></span></font><br>
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Thanks a lot for your patience during the review process! We look forward to your comments on the above items. If there are any changes to be made, perhaps we should first have CC Czech go ahead with proofreading and add any changes you've spotted. Then, we'll ask if you could implemented all
changes and re-send the XHTML for a final time. Does that sounds like a good approach?<br><br>We really appreciate your help here. Thanks again, and take care! <br><br>-- Michelle and Catharina<br><br><div class="gmail_quote">
On Wed, Mar 18, 2009 at 4:36 PM, Michelle Thorne <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:michelle@creativecommons.org">michelle@creativecommons.org</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">
Nathan, thanks a lot for uploading the files! <br><br>Dear Marek, Petr, and Lukas,<br><br>Catharina and I are currently proofreading the licenses, and we will send along any comments by tomorrow. Pending any revisions from CCi, we'll ask you to carefully review all the licenses on staging and send us your final approval. But first we should hold off until Catharina and I have completed our proofreading, so that you can follow up with us first should any questions arise. <br>
<br>Thank you all for your support! This is the homestrech. ^_^<br><br>Until soon,<br><br>-- Michelle<br><br><br><br><br><br><div class="gmail_quote">2009/3/16 Nathan Kinkade <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:nkinkade@creativecommons.org" target="_blank">nkinkade@creativecommons.org</a>></span><div>
<div></div><div class="h5"><br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">Hi everyone,<br>
<br>
Here are the licenses that Marek sent on the 14th:<br>
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<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
<a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
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</div>Thanks!<br>
<font color="#888888"><br>
Nathan<br>
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On Sun, Mar 15, 2009 at 4:39 AM, Catharina Maracke<br>
<<a href="mailto:catharina@creativecommons.org" target="_blank">catharina@creativecommons.org</a>> wrote:<br>
> Marek,<br>
><br>
> Thanks for clarification. I pretty confident that things are perfectly fine<br>
> now - but let's have a final look once these files are on the staging server<br>
> before we press the green light button :-))<br>
><br>
> Nathan, could you upload these recent files again?<br>
><br>
> Thanks a lot!<br>
><br>
> Catharina<br>
><br>
><br>
> Dr. Catharina Maracke<br>
> <a href="mailto:catharina@creativecommons.org" target="_blank">catharina@creativecommons.org</a><br>
><br>
><br>
><br>
><br>
> On Mar 14, 2009, at 7:52 PM, Marek Tichy wrote:<br>
><br>
>> Dear Michelle Thorne napsal(a):<br>
>>><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nd/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>> <a href="http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode" target="_blank">http://staging.creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/cz/legalcode</a><br>
>>><br>
>>> Dear all,<br>
>>><br>
>>> Please find above the links generated from the files Marek sent on<br>
>>> Feb. 27 and uploaded by Nathan on March 3. Petr, I understand that you<br>
>>> and Catharina have discussed and agreed upon the English<br>
>>> re-translation of the BY NC SA? Is it correct to assume that the files<br>
>>> above reflect those recent revisions?<br>
>><br>
>> No, not correct. The attached zip file contains the latest version of<br>
>> the files. These replace any older ones and contain the latest revisions.<br>
>>><br>
>>> If there are any changes be made now, I would kindly ask you and Marek<br>
>>> to revise the respective license and resend the XHTML for uploading.<br>
>><br>
>> Attached. Please kindly upload them.<br>
>>><br>
>>> If there are no necessary changes for now, please feel free to begin<br>
>>> proofreading via the links.<br>
>><br>
>> There should not be any more changes (fingers crossed).<br>
>>><br>
>>> Petr, once you've confirmed that the files are up-to-date and all<br>
>>> necessary changes have been made, Catharina and I will begin<br>
>>> proofreading as well.<br>
>><br>
>> I think you can start, the zip contains the latest retranslation with<br>
>> the changes Petr and Catharina have agreed on (highligted).<br>
>>><br>
>>> Thanks so much for your time and efforts on this! We're on the<br>
>>> homestretch! :-)<br>
>><br>
>> Thank you too !<br>
>><br>
>> Cheers<br>
>> Marek<br>
>> <legalcodes_cz_090314.zip><br>
><br>
><br>
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+49 302 191 582 66<br><br><a href="http://creativecommons.org/international" target="_blank">creativecommons.org/international</a><br>
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</div></div></blockquote></div><br><br clear="all"><br>-- <br>----------------------------------------------<br>Michelle Thorne<br>Eisenacher Strasse 2<br>10777 Berlin, Germany<br>+49 302 191 582 66<br><br><a href="http://creativecommons.org/international">creativecommons.org/international</a><br>
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