[Mmwg] revised draft input

[Milton Mueller]

Bill's revision gives me some problems. Some of the editing is quite an improvement. But massive editorial changes are combined with major changes in substance. Mixing those two things up is extremely troublesome when we have basically a few hours to agree on a text. We have to agree on what our position is before polishing the words. I suggest that we move foward using Wolfgang's text and once we agree on the basic points we can start wordsmithing. 

>>> "William Drake" <drake at hei.unige.ch> 2/27/2006 8:25 AM >>>
Hello,

Thanks to Wolfgang for giving us something we can sink our teeth into.  My suggestions and questions to the group are in the attached file.  Please view with Word Track Changes on.  My apologies to anyone who doesn't use Word, I don't know how the changes will be displayed in that case.

Basically I like Wolfgang's direction but had some language/presentation concerns and felt that some important issues needed to be added, most notably with respect to working groups etc.  I also had some concerns about concrete proposals that to my knowledge had not been agreed or even discussed in the group.  I tried to recast these in a manner that seemed less likely to be problematic, but who knows what we can really agree on in the next 24 hours or so.

Best,

Bill

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Director, Project on the Information
  Revolution and Global Governance
  Graduate Institute for International Studies
  Geneva, Switzerland 
President, Computer Professionals for 
   Social Responsibility
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